Look at the transitions between paragraphs or between sections. How does he or she make these transitions? What effect do they have on the forward momentum of the piece?
I feel like the transition in this piece were done o.k.. I felt in some places that I would have no idea where she was coming from and how she got there. I dont think they were effective enough in the transitions. I dont think it good to be as choppy as this piece may be. I think Momaday could have done a better job but it wasnt horrible.
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I agree with you that it was choppy. And although it might not have been a horrible job, it's one writing that doesn't stay in mind. Honestly speaking, I've already forgotten the whole essay.
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